Friday, February 21, 2014

Blogging with Malaysia on our Butterfly Project

Today we will be viewing the blogs of our friends in Malaysia, as well as the blogs of our peers in class. You will be provided a rubric in which to use to assess your peers. Below is an example of what an inappropriate vs. an appropriate comment looks like.


Comments:

Inappropriate - This is a really good butterfly with lots of information. I like the way you used the colors and the images really show the meaning in the poem. It is just the right size and shape and very clear. Your writing is also very clear and it was easy to read. Well done. (Too general & rushed. Not thought behind it- could apply to any butterfly. Not rooted in the text)

Appropriate - I really liked your use of color, especially when you chose black to represent death instead of the usual red. I feel that really made your piece stand out. When you used the words 'to hell and back' I think you captured one of the key ideas in the poem and the rest of the images support this. They are all quite thought-provoking and by including one of the actual camp gates, we can see how intimidating it must have been for small children to be trapped there. You have a couple of typos with spelling such as 'scary' and 'terezin' without a capital letter, but overall, your butterfly really made me see more meaning in the poem and appreciate the emotions that the writer tried to communicate. Thanks!


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